The Escape(remixed)

For my second bitstrips comic I kept the same slides with just swapping some positions of the characters. I didn't change my artwork because I thought my scenes and characters were pretty good to start with. What I did change was the dialog. In my first one I had almost the same thing as the book so this time I mostly stayed to the plot, but added different dialog. I wanted to make fun of Marcus so I did my best to portray Marcus as a loser hard core gamer, but I'm not sure how successful I was. If I were to grade myself I think I would be in the A- range, and my first one was about a B-.

Comic life comic

In this comic I think that I depict a paradox of the false positive and how the police now try to attack terrorists. After a National disaster the police is on high alert and heavily question people that have no qualities of a terrorist. In the book they detain Marcus and company and see if their terrorists but they are obviously not and just high school students. Now the police think that the terrorists are now blending themselves into society so anybody could be an actual terrorists. The government wants to remove this threat from society at all costs and this might meaning taking away the freedoms and rights of people to remove the problem. This in my opinion is my best comic out of the three because I clearly presented the situation at hand and made it slightly humorous to make the reader interested.

Comic life comic

In this comic I think that I depict a paradox of the false positive and how the police now try to attack terrorists. After a National disaster the police is on high alert and heavily question people that have no qualities of a terrorist. In the book they detain Marcus and company and see if their terrorists but they are obviously not and just high school students. Now the police think that the terrorists are now blending themselves into society so anybody could be an actual terrorists. The government wants to remove this threat from society at all costs and this might meaning taking away the freedoms and rights of people to remove the problem. This in my opinion is my best comic out of the three because I clearly presented the situation at hand and made it slightly humorous to make the reader interested. file:///Users/nelsonscharffenberger/Desktop/comic.cl2doc/

revised bitstrips

In my first attempt at making a comic on bitstrips.com I thought I was missing some key components in this to make the story flow with some humor involved. In my revised comic I added the component that Marcus is acting as a mature adult while he has some traits that are still childish. He acts more like he is an experienced adult where he drinks coffee regularly and also seems to like to taste of alcohol and likes to drink alcohol occasionally. For my first comic I would give myself a low "B" because I had most of my ideas in the comic but I was missing the conclusion that would bring the main idea to the reader. Now that I added some finishing touches that makes the comic understandable I would give myself an "A-" because I have a good idea and it flows throughout the comic.

Bitstrips #2

I added 3 new lines to my original comic strip. In my second attempt, I tried to emphasize my main point of what would happen if the government was looking for terrorists, but rather found other types of venial crimes. This strip shows people in line to be seen by the police explaining their irrelevant crimes and wondering where they are going. Eventually, those in charge realize that the economy cannot handle that many people being taken out of society and that they have no place to put all these criminals. The final two frames show an alternate to overcrowded jails (internment camps... they've happened before) and then finally a large crowd of diverse people being united over their hate and frustration with the government in their shared jail cell.

I would have given myself a B on the first comic because I did put a lot of effort into, but I did not entirely finish portraying the thought I started. I think the second comic I made deserves an A because I doubled the amount length of the comic in order to fully portray the idea and message that the first draft started. This final draft shows my original idea, has humor, and also brings the idea around full circle and shows the big picture outcome.

This comic made with Comic Life focuses on the theme of redefining the norm and Marcus' false positive plan. In the novel, Marcus creates a way to mislead the police into thinking that basically everyone in the city is a terrorist by swapping people's Fast Trak numbers and other "trackers" that the police use to keep an eye on the citizens. My comic remixes that idea into one that's a little more relevant to us college students. Instead of trying to deceive the police into thinking everyone's a criminal, the Marcus in my comic devises a way to make his entire hallway smell like weed in order to trick his residence hall's CF so that he can't bust anyone for smoking. The idea does not reflect what I've done or seen being done, it's just the first idea that popped into my head.

My second Bitstrips comic addresses the theme of privacy and how the DHS is essentially trying to deny Marcus and his friends of their privacy. The comic shows what happens to Darryl after Marcus, Van, and Jolu are kidnapped by the DHS. I feel that my previous comic deserves an A because I feel that I was able to portray the theme of paranoia quite well using my own original ideas, while also showing a connection to the original text. As for this comic, I feel that it also deserves an A because I put a lot of effort into the design and organization and also tried to think of an unique and "out-of-the-box" idea to portray in the comic.

Bitstrip 2

The difference between my first and second comic strips is that my second includes what Marcus was doing the night before, showing his passion for the game, and the priorities he has. I think my old grade would have been a B, because it conveyed the message simply, but it didn't have enough substance to it or show enough about what the character cares about. Now I think the strip is an A because anyone who has read the book understands the portrayal and appreciates the humor.

BitStrip Comic #2

I completely rethought my first Bit Strip and came up with a new idea for my re-do. Instead of just showing part of the story everyone has already read about, I decided to show a part of the story nobody read about, what was happening at home when Marcus was being detained. I believe my first Bit Strip was probably deserving of a low B. It had a clear connection to the material, and the events flowed, but it wasn't very creative. I think this Bit Strip is in the low A's. It has a clear connection to the material, flows and makes sense, and shows another aspect of the book not previously explored.

Revised bitstrip

My bit strip is a comical version of the relationship between the Homeland Security and Marcus. At first Marcus was very stubborn and not cooperating, however with a few threats and consequences, Marcus breaks and gives all his information. After thinking for a long time about what I could change from my original bit strip and couldn't find much. With the notes in the class discussion I felt like my bit strip had many of the qualities of a grade "A" bit strip. I feel like my bit strip follows the original plot of Little Brother as well as showing creativity. Though it is a low stakes project I feel like the bit strip is A quality.

2nd and 3rd Comic

This comic I like a lot more than the first one I did. The concept comes from chapter 10 when Jolu tells Marcus that he is out. I attack Marcus' ignorance by asking him what he means - too many times - and I tried to make this one have a more humorous appeal. I took a lot more time on this one in terms of different croppings and sizes of the boxes. I also tried to capture closer up sections of Jolu's and Marcus' faces. Even though the last comic was low stakes I believe I deserved a B because my ideas were conveyed, but I feel like I could have maybe ellaborated more and exaggerated more in certain areas of the comic. This comic I believe is A quality according to the rubrics we created in class because I made it much more creative and original, there is an obvious connection to a particular scene in the book, and it took me a lot of time to configure my ideas visually and in the thought process. I am also a lot happier with this one, and felt more comfortable creating it. :)










The second comic is on Operation False Positive when it's in motion. I decided to spoof it with the idea of Mario Kart. I found this to be fun because they concept fit well. In Mario Kart, you are constantly going to random tracks in different environments. I used this as reasons for the DHS/police to pull over Mario when he's in the middle of a race tournament. I am happy with the way it came out. However, this program is a lot harder to use and it's tricky. I think it's good in that you can distort the elements of the pictures and text. Still, it's hard to find a concrete idea and be consistent through out the comic.

Revised Bitstrip & Comic Life Work

REVISED BITSTRIP:

For my second Bitstrip, I made my comic more concise by using less wording and fewer frames. I felt like my first Bitstrip was vague and didn't really focus much on a significant aspect of the literature. However, the Bitstrip above displays Marcus' personality and highlights his habit of annoyingly repeating the same question when being asked something. A similar situation occurred when severe hair cut lady asked Marcus to unlock his phone and he wouldn't answer her question.

Even though this is a low-stakes assignment and if this were being graded, I would give myself a B+ for my second draft comic strip. I would give my first draft a B- because I could have focused on a more significant scene or theme. Also, my first comic strip could have a stronger connection to the literature.

COMIC LIFE:

The comic above depicts the paradox of the false positive and the change in the police's ability to accurately find terrorists. Before the attack, the police did not heavily question U.S. citizens or suspect them of being terrorists. Therefore, the U.S. citizens blend into society and the appearance of a terrorist (or gorilla) is more prominent. This trust that the police had with the identities of their citizens disappeared as soon as the attack occurred. After the attack, the police question almost every U.S. citizen even if they are not doing something questionable or unusual. Depicted in the bottom frame of my comic, the U.S. citizens are seen as terrorists (or gorillas) in the eyes of the police. Therefore, it is harder to tell which gorilla is the REAL gorilla and not a U.S. citizen mistakingly depicted as gorillas.

Bitstrips Comic

My bitstrips comic took the form as an alternative ending. I focused on chapters 1-5, but more specifically chapter 2. In this chapter, Winston and Darryl decided to ditch class to go find a clue needed to play the game Harajuku Fun Madness. While the team, consisting of Winston, Darrly, Jolu, and Van, were searching for the clue, an unusual earthquake interrupted them followed by sirens yelling for people to "Report to shelters immediately". In the novel, Winston and his team head towards BART, but end up crawling their way back out to the streets because of all the people. From there they get kidnapped by the Department of Homeland Security, and the story begins. However, in my alternative ending comic, I chose to leave the story as if they stayed on BART and didn't head back up. The result would've been their deaths because of the BART explosion stated later in the story.

My bitstrip is about the first 5 chapters. I tried to catch the stubbornness of Marcus while he was in the detainment of the Department of Homeland security. In the book the nice hair lady asked him multiple time to cooperate but he never did. So after many threats and consequences, Marcus finally broke and complied with the

demands of

the DHS.

Bitstripzzzz

I created my comic to portray the scene in which Marcus brings up the point that the strategies society are taking to fight terrorism are extremely counterproductive. This is right after he gets back into school and the conversation is between him and Ms Galvez. I think the theme of society's fear leading to ignorance is extremely prevalent in the novel. I tried to portray that... not in a comedic light really... but hopefully it will convey the theme I'm trying to highlight!

Comicon 2011

This comic was meant to highlight a few key concepts from the book, 'Little Brother'. The first of these is how Marcus is very hostile towards interrogations and responds vehemently. The second concept highlighted here is the paranoia that Marcus feels after his interrogation. He believes that he is always being targeted after he was abducted. The final scene shows how this paranoia often leads him to make irrational decisions.

http://www.bitstrips.com/user/260607/read.php?comic_id=1293037&sc=1

Bro Talk

I was unaware that our bitstrip comic needed to incorporate Marcus in Little Brother.
Instead, I thought we could create a comic on whatever theme we chose.  So, my comic, called "Bro Talk", highlights the humors of male conversation.  By hardly saying five words, the characters Bro Montana and Broseph Stalin have conjured up an entire conversation.  This use of paralanguage is used constantly in our society, where body language and nonverbal messages are almost more important than the words that are said.  There are also many ways in which one word can be interpreted, like for instance the word "bro" in this comic.
I apologize for creating a comic outside of the assignment.

A.J.

For my comic strip I chose to focus on and sort of mock Marcus' defiance. When he was being interrogated, he could have easily cooperated and avoided a lot of controversy, but instead he insisted on seeing a lawyer even though he clearly was not taken by the police. While his defiance is unrealistic, it represents American society's value of freedom. In my strip, Marcus is in class, tired and groggy. The teacher then asks for the homework, which he didn't do, to be passed forward. He then proceeds to ask for a lawyer. This is similar to the story in that he is in trouble and asks for a lawyer in a setting where he cannot have one. The difference between this strip and the book is that Marcus is actually guilty here.

Bitstrips Comic

For my comic, I decided to focus on a scene in Chapter 9 of Little Brother. In this scene, Marcus is conversing with his mother about how his father's views differ from his. Marcus is upset that his dad promotes the DHS's efforts to catch the terrorists no matter what--even if it means invading everyone's privacy. In the comic, I wanted to portray Marcus acting dramatic about the situation because he really doesn't even consider the reason why his father holds this opinion until his mom tells him: his parents thought he was dead. Ultimately, his parents truly do love him and would do anything for them--even fall back in love for Marcus's sake. I think that Marcus takes this for granted and still continues to fight against the DHS, putting him and his parents at stake. Also, I think it's funny that Marcus is so obsessed with coffee, so I added a little part about that as well.

comiccccccc

This is my comic. Marcus is clearly one step ahead of everyone else when it comes to using and abusing technology. My comic focuses on one of the abilities Marcus has to be able to bend/break the rules to be able to do whatever he wants. He's figured out his way into every part of his school's paranoid system. Using this program helped me realize that a lot more work goes into making a comic than I thought and that programs like this help people find a simpler way to create comics.

comic

This my comic that I composed. In Chapter 10 Marcus and Jolu try to gather enough support to take on the Department of Homeland Security but I thought it was odd that they were going to throw a party and bringing a a lot of beer. These technological superior guys in my opinion don't seem like they would consume a lot of alcohol and same with their friends that they invited. In my opinion it seemed kind of strange that Marcus and Jolu called this party together to see if they can rely on these people to communicate with who I think are smart people but I don't think they would consume any alcohol. This is only a prediction but I think that they find these reliable people and it will be a successful way to communicate.

In my comic strip I portray the main character Marcus as a young man who is able to dodge trouble and talk his way out of any situation. The actual book introduces Marcus as a boy who has an appealing life and no troubles, when suddenly his world is turned upside down by the destruction of the Bay Bridge. Marcus is then accused of being a terrorist and is kidnapped and thrown in jail. During his time in jail, Marcus is tortured and starved by Homeland Security. Although he is eventually set free, Marcus had to endure things that he had never imagined could have been done to him before. My comic focuses on the theme that Marcus suddenly had to face real life danger, something he never had to do before the terrorist attack.

Comic

This my comic that I composed. In Chapter 10 Marcus and Jolu try to gather enough support to take on the Department of Homeland Security but I thought it was odd that they were going to throw a party and bringing a a lot of beer. These technological superior guys in my opinion don't seem like they would consume a lot of alcohol and same with their friends that they invited. In my opinion it seemed kind of strange that Marcus and Jolu called this party together to see if they can rely on these people to communicate with who I think are smart people but I don't think they would consume any alcohol. This is only a prediction but I think that they find these reliable people and it will be a successful way to communicate.

http://www.bitstrips.com/user/260608/read.php?comic_id=1290559&sc=1

L1TT13 BR0TH3R

For my remix, I focused on chapters 1-5 mainly and I included a few scenes from the later chapters. I paraphrased most of the dialogue and got it down into its simplest form. I also included some profanities in order to convey my perception of certain characters. I also played on several scenarios within the book that I found funny; for example, the sexual tension that exists between Van and Marcus, and when Van blends in with the Asian tourists during the attack. All in all, the comic was fairly easy to make and the book itself was an easy read.

bit strips

This is my comic strip for chapters one to five; my comic is the sparks notes version of how Marcus and Daryl got out of school when they wanted to go play Harajuka fun madness. It is not exactly what happens in the book but it gets the main points across. Overall using the program was not hard at all. I got a little better perspective on how much work goes into a real comic because there is a lot of background drawing and other stuff like that. The program does a good job of bypassing the hard parts of making a comic strip very well.

LB Bitstrips Comic

I decided to remake the scene where Marcus is on the XNet in the middle of the night when he hears and sees a couple of DHS detectives lurking outside of his home. The men seem to be searching for a type of signal, which Marcus soon discovers is the signal that the XNet gives off. In my comic, I decided to remix the scene so that the DHS detectives do track a signal, but upon bursting into the house, find that the signal came from the wrong house. My comic tries to represent the power hungry, paranoid attitude of the DHS and how they will use the most extreme of measures to get their "job" done.

marcus' secret

In reading Little Brother, I was incredibly bothered by the fact that Marcus wouldn’t just unlock his phone in the first place. For the comic, I wanted to play off the discussion we had in class about any other illegal or incriminating items that could be found on someone’s cell phone. Rather than illegally downloaded music, my comic strip features a picture of Marcus on his phone of him participating in illegal activities. This remix shows that even if Marcus had cooperated from the beginning of the novel, he would have most likely still been followed and inconvenienced by the government.

BitStrip

My Bitstrip focuses on the reading of Chapters 1-5. However, it follows what some of the DHS people are doing while Marcus is in the holding cell. In my comic I try to portray some of the plot holes and I also tried to sprinkle in some comical effects. It begins with Marcus locked up in the cell after giving them the first password. His reward was a pizza from goat hill pizza, which he is being detained in the back of. Then the two DHS agents go and talk about the situation to a couple of drinks in the front of the room. In the end he pisses himself and she for comical effects just apparently forgot about him because he was the only one who would not unlock his phone.

Bitstrip

My Bitstrip focuses on the reading of Chapters 1-5 when Marcus convinces Darryl to ditch school to solve an Asian tech-geek scavenger hunt. From the start of the book, I got a very egotistical and arrogant vibe from Marcus. In my comic strip, I portrayed Marcus as someone who thinks he is the coolest guy on Earth and knows everything. On the other hand, Darryl contradicts Marcus’ personality because he is corrupted and persuaded by Marcus’ bad schemes. In the end of my Bitstrip, Darryl is dead but Marcus still expresses his pompous traits.